Sunday, November 30, 2008

Victim/Culprit???

A shadow over my head grew in size engulfing me in that darkness...
Like bonds that held my hands tied and kept my feet frozen...
It was the shadow of hopelessness, eclipsing my bright faith in myself...
It was the shadow of grief, plaguing my world of happiness...
And somewhere deep within I was shouting, to remove the bondages and be set free...
In a vain effort i tried hiding it from all, and in all this confusion, they saw a different me...
They saw a selfish, hungry man; not the one they could trust...
They saw an ambition, a fire of desire, an ever burning lust...

I realized it was my failure, a risk I shouldn't have taken...
When the chances were more of failure, thinking about them everyone was shaken...

However, I could not have just let it go, whether you judge me today right or wrong...
But do tell me where were you that day when I was left all so alone...
When no one supported me, held my hand or even spoke a friendly tone...
When I was crying instead of celebrating...
When she left us all for her last journey even before she could see her child breathing...

All you did was think and talk, but no one dared to make a move...
While in that incubator, she lied quietly, waiting for her mother's love...
Waiting for her to take her away from those tubes, wires and pipes...
The God had played a cruel game with my darling's life...
Her heart had betrayed her  just like her mother...
She needed help or else she would face that pain forever...

What else could I have done, you tell me?
What was my fault, how would you punish me?
When I have given the biggest punishment to myself...
When Gods have conspired against me and my life...
Who can punish me more, who has a bigger might...
What else can you take away from me, now that I have lost everything...
My hopes, my desires and my life, cut away by a blade...
From me, on my very operation bed...
Lying cold and silent... DEAD..........



This always gives me cold shivers whenever I read this. Tell me whether u liked my attempt or not.....

9 comments:

Harsh said...
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suvra said...

ur alter-ego has come alive.....
Keep Writing!!!!!!!!!

Siddhartha said...

Yippee!!!Yippee!!Hurray!!Hurray!!! A new poet is born. Mr.Tennyson , Mr. Keats take notice. Someone's coming to join you in the ranks!!!
No..seriously dude...it was good.....feels good to see you write so prolifically....and i am sorry for being such an asshole and being offline and all that....i will make up for lost time and review all your works that i haven't....in the meanwhile write some more....

roson said...

As gold shines day by day ,when it becomes older, now u r also.i think u go 2 the nxt uplevel of ur creativity range,it was really gud ..
keep tryin man,,
really gud 1 !!!!!!!!!

Shwetabh said...

hey
it's really fantastic
the poems you write really touch the hearts and that's what makes them unforgettable
keep it up

Saket said...

@suvra - thanx a lot but plz be kind enough to also explain what you meant, thats in what way you tried to mean it

@sid- thanx bro for the more than expected response. yeah, and its embarassing too ....but am i that good?? nah, i knw dat

@roson- hey, thanx a lot for that... but gold loses some weight as it gets older to keep its shine... wat do u think abt that??

@shwetabh- i am very happy that it touched your heart 'coz as i wrote this gives me goosebumps when i really think about such a thing... thanx for the comment

Dibyendu said...

a really gud poem which brings out the irony of a society. It was made to help us out....while all it does today is to make everyone follow its mindless rules. And in the process if someone fails...they are always ready with...'I said so, u dint pay any heed'.

Arjun said...

Hey buddy.. Wat a fantastic post this is......
Gave me cold shivers as well...
Just superb...

Y dont u join Writer's Lounge - (www.weandwords.blogspot.com) It's a grp blog... U can really get views.... U deserve it... leave ur ID in the shoutbox there

And hey, thanks for reading my blog.. I am amazed that u've read most of my stories and liked them..... Would Like to see ur comments....
Cheers..!!
Arjun

Saket said...

@Dib - thanx a lot.. I will just add to what you felt and I somewhat agree with you. But we also get our friends in this society who are there to support us in times of need. We need to care abt them and not those who don't care abt us

@Arjun - Thanks for visiting my blog and also for the wonderful praises. I am gonna be active soon on Blogosphere again. Just taking my time off. Hope you will keep visiting