Thursday, February 05, 2009

Loved and Lost

 

A.1: She woke up early. It was a special day for her. She had waited for this day for so long and was very excited. She took out the gift box, carefully gift wrapped and placed it on the breakfast table near his plate and waited for him. But he did not come. She saw him walk out from his room and then through the main gate, all dressed up for office. Then she heard his car start and he was gone.  

Didn’t he even remember? Could he not have just talked to me? Was I wrong in thinking that even he loved me? Whats the use now of this?

She tore the gift wrap and the letter. The words love and husband which existed together on the same paper were now separated.


B.1: He stepped into the hallway making no sound. No one was there. She must have gone out to the neighbor’s house or for some shopping. Ohh!! He could not wait any longer. Then he saw an envelope lying on the table and picked it up.

 

C.1: They had been married now for 3 years. It was an arranged marriage and both of them had been forced by their respective families to tie the knot to which they had reluctantly agreed. But they had been frank and honest to each other and told them about their individual past. They had then decided to let the relationship continue for as long as one didn’t want it to end as it was impossible for either of them to go back to their old lives. They were initially not happy with the situation and definitely not in love with each other. They compromised, often got frustrated with whatever was happening around them, why were they not getting what they wanted. Then they learnt to live with each other, helping the other person in their work and small stuffs like that. Small efforts, little shows of affection and care showed its effect.  Slowly, they were happy together and no more considered the relationship a burden. And then they fell in love with each other but neither was able to understand what the other person felt for them as neither of them expressed their feelings.

 

A.2: She went to her cupboard and took out an envelope. She placed it exactly where she had placed the box. And then she walked out of thedoor.

 

B.2: He called her but there wasn’t any reply. He remembered how he had rushed in the early morning and bought the most beautiful thing he could imagine for her. He wanted to give it to her and express his feelings at that time but his office work just did not spare him. All day long, he thought of surprising her and thinking about how she would react to that. Now, he was home but she was not there. He cursed his neighbors. And then he saw the envelope lying on the table. He picked it up, tore it open and found a few papers inside it. There was a letter also inside. It was small, only 3 lines long and read—

“I just found a new job for me which is much bigger and better than the one I have now. I’ll have to leave the city. Let’s call an end to this little play of ours.”
 

The documents lying there had the heading – “DIVORCE.”

He sat down on the chair.

Didn’t she even remember? Could she not just have talked to me? Was I wrong in thinking that even she loved me? Whats the use now of this?

He threw the box on the table and signed the divorce papers which already had her signatures on them. The box dropped and the diamonds fell on the floor. A note slipped out which read – “Happy Anniversary Darling.”


S.R.

21 comments:

Siddhartha said...

hey!!!!dont keep me waiting.....i always thought that u write the best lost-love poems...i will have to add stories to that too.....
i can see your writing evolving...its become compact,concise&power packed...gosh if i cud wryt lyk tht...........

Saket said...

Thanx sid!! thanx a lot.. you do not know what these words mean to me!! I am so low on confidence and doubting with my writing capabilities these days that this is like a fresh breath of air for me!!

But I'll always argue -- U write better than me!!

Cheerzz

suvra said...

i see Moha has beaten me in the race...but ...sorry,buddy...got a li'l late...
Nywez....abt the story..as usual..loved the ending..surprising as ever...!!!!!!!!!!!
4 further opinion...wait 4 my next blog.(b patient enuf)..
Keep Writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Saket said...

@ subhra -- I am waiting... And I know when its u writing a blog, a long wait is what one has to expect :)

Cheerzz

Shwetabh said...

a really gud one
however i hav noticed that you hav started talking a lot about break-ups and stuff... just wanted to be sure that there is nothing serious behind these thoughts.

vinkesh said...

a funny story :) ... i laughed out louder than moha after reading it...

Saket said...

@ shwetabh -- Nothin serious dude!! Mujhe kabhi bhi happy notes likhte dekha hai. All my poems from the very first ones have one common thread -- grief and anger. As I once said -- I love the darker side of life. So is displayed in my blog.

@Vinkesh -- Good that I could bring out a laughter louder than Moha!! But I guess that's impossible. I trust my team partner's capabilities. It is difficult to reach that level. :)

Siddhartha said...

abe saalon.....ab kya net main bhi izzat ka waat laga daaloge...aur koi nahin milta nahin hai kya....kahen mujhpe emosonal attyachar kar rahe ho.....
@saket- itna modest mat ho...you are a far better storyteller than me...waise bhi agar main story likhoonga toh college block kar dega:p

Saket said...

@sid- izzat ki wat kisne lagayi boss!! main to teri tarif kar raha tha, and i am serious.i have that much confidence in u buddy.

cheerzz

AbP.. said...

serious complains..
a tragic end to a lovely start..
why do you do so..
you know well..we people try to stay away from "sad" love stories even if this darker side has always been haunting every one..
still..i can just be a follower of a writer like you..you are beyond any simple praises and applauds..
cheers..
:)

Saket said...

Thanks Peeyush for thise lovely words of encouragement.. But probably u got it wrong somewhere.. there wasn't a lovely start to this story.. and it had to end in a tragic way to be realistic.. Hope u got my point.. keep visiting

Arjun said...

wow.. tat was wonderful writing...
I'm lost.. :)

Cheers..!!
Arjun

Saket said...

@arjun -- thanks a lot. that's all i will say!!

jack said...

hey that was touching, i got so involved reading it, i wish i could some how talk to them and make it all ok...
very well written man

Saket said...

@chintan - thanx dude!!
i think i will try and change the end and then come up with a different story.

Anirudh induchudan said...

nice one.. i think u shoul change ur template..it's difficult to read and painful to eyes..just my opinion

Saket said...

@ anirudh -- thanks for visiting.. but the theme is my fav.. so if u don't mind, I would not like to change it. Please keep visiting..

Abhi Binani said...

My My.... dt ws a treat to read, dude bt one thing, want something different this time, you almost managed to wet my eyes..... nw smthng to bring the smile as well.. :)

Saket said...

@abhi--sorry, but it is also an art to bring tears to the eyes as it is to bring a smile on the face. Next try might be an attempt that you like(though i feel u did like this too, ain't it?)

Keep Visiting!!!

Kuki said...

beautiful!!
d story actualy brot tears in my eyes :)

Saket said...

@ Kuki -- really!! i didn't write it to make someone cry.. anyway thanks for the comments